Flash Friday

Today I am joining Flash Friday Fictioneers.  The photo prompt is courtesy of Madison Woods.  Her story can be found here, along with links to all the other Flash Friday Fictioneers.  As keeping in tune with my blog, I limited my story to 50 words. Enjoy.

Fungus Among Us

He sat, as if emerging, rootless, from the steel and glass.  Suits, taking no notice, walked by on their way to take-out sushi lunches; just another example of the city in decay.  Broken and alone, he sat with his head down and waited for the sound of pity.

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31 comments
  1. I love the line “just another example of the city in decay. I’m not sure if this is how you intended it, but it seems to refer as much to the suits as to the MC, which I really liked. And wow, 50 words – I find 100 hard to stick to!
    Mine is here if you want to take a look: http://wp.me/p1PeVl-3s

    • Janet said:

      Thank you and thanks for the link. I’ll check it out.

  2. Christy said:

    Waiting for pity is an easy hole to dig oneself into, isn’t it? You capture a lot in such a small number of words, well done! Thanks again for nominating me for the Liebster Award, I posted my acceptance speech (hehe) today in the post “Blog Love” http://poeticparfait.wordpress.com/2012/02/11/blog-love/

    Christy

    • Janet said:

      Thanks for your comments Christy and you are welcome for the award (your acceptance speech was very gracious! 🙂 )

      • Christy said:

        Awe thanks Janet for taking a read. I hope you are having a wonderful weekend.

  3. Madison Woods said:

    Hi Janet, it’s hard enough for me to make a story in 100 words but you manage to do it beautifully in only half that amount. Nice. Loved the reference to decay and the fact that mushrooms only grow in decay situations.

    • Janet said:

      thanks. I found the mushroom image was easy to work with. As as I saw from all the other stories I read, it could go in so many directions. I’m now looking forward to next week’s image.

    • Janet said:

      Thanks, I’ll now take a look at yours.

  4. Lora Mitchell said:

    Hi Janet: Welcome. I’m also a newby…with two of Madison’s photo prompts now under my belt. How talented to do all that …so solidly packed in only 50 words. Your pathetic person made me ponder and provoked questions. Why has he given up on life? Why is there not a single spark of hope? And seeking self-pity? I know this person. I see him all over my city…either homeless or a druggie. Once in a while, one will pick up his bootstraps and get on with life. Here’s mine: http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspoit.com

  5. Judee said:

    Beautiful writing, and what an interesting blog you have here. I love the idea of the Postcard theme for the posts, keeping it short, but so much to say in so few words.

    • Janet said:

      Thanks Judee, I find writing short helps me write better longer fiction.

  6. Yes, a very nice start, Janet; a perceptive picture of rootlessness in the midst of the busy city. You could have used all the words available and written a novel!

    • Janet said:

      Thanks Carlos, sometimes I overdo it with a theme but I was pretty happy how this one turned out.

  7. Oh so sad but so powerful. A picture painted so clearly, so quickly.

    • Janet said:

      Thank you, glad you thought so.

  8. Really interesting take on the prompt. Written with great skill./

    • Janet said:

      thanks Craig. It’s amazing how differenct each interpretation of the prompt was.

  9. Janet, you made me want to cry. When you write it, I want to go and give this person a hug and ask him what’s the matter. But, I am sad to say that in real life I would likely walk by like the sushi guys, averting my eyes and feeling guilty, 😦 But I think your words will come to mind the next time I see someone standing on the corner of the off-ramp…

    • Janet said:

      Thanks for stopping by and yes, I do plan to return to the Fictioneers.

    • Janet said:

      Thank you, I’m glad you came by.

    • Janet said:

      Thanks. You should see what I can do with 100 😉

  10. Mike said:

    A great story and just 50 words.
    I like the idea of 50 word stories – must have a go.

  11. 50 words? Wow! It’s really great. If it’s me writing, I think it will take me 250 words to picture out my thoughts. I think I’ll give writing short stories a try. It’s not too late for me, am I right? 🙂

    • Janet said:

      Oh it’s never to late! Just try it.

    • Janet said:

      Good. I glad you felt that way.

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