You trap me in your headlights.  One side of me revealed.

You observe my stark, pale form.

To you, I am a bright vision in the dusk.

A vivid apparition.

See what you want.

Walk towards the light.

I will lead you into darkness.


Today’s post is part of Flash Friday Fictioneers.  The photo prompt is courtesy of Madison Woods Her story can be found here, along with links to all the other Flash Friday Fictioneers.  As keeping in tune with my blog, I limited my story to 50 words. Enjoy.

    • Janet said:

      Oops, yes. Better update the post. Thanks for telling me.

      • Gary said:

        It wasn’t obvious really, but I’m glad it helped!

  1. Loved it…very suspenseful…succinct…leaves me wanting to know more…

  2. A tale both cryptic and vivid. Seems to me also to be a snippet of something bigger. Well done.

  3. Madison Woods said:

    Everyone else has used the words I would have used…ominous, mysterious, and not sure if I’d trust those trees. Great story!

  4. Lora Mitchell said:

    I agree with Quill. I immed. read this as a prose poem as well. Reading only 50 words. I sometimes feel cheated. I would like to see what you come up with in 100 words instead of 50. Maybe one day you will surprise us? Here’s mine:

  5. Ohh, this is gorgeous. Ominous is exactly the right word, or profoundly sinister.

    Have you read The Glister by John Burnside? I just finished it and it reminded so much of this. Lovely.

    • Janet said:

      I haven’t read that book but I’m curious now. I’ll check the library once they reopen (they are closed here due to a strike, it really sucks.)


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