You

You arrived suddenly and unexpectedly.

You were immediately possessive.

You stomped on my heart with your heavy boots.

You left me with nothing but a footprint that will scar forever.

*****

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34 comments
    • Janet said:

      Thanks Norma, I’m glad you liked it.

    • Janet said:

      thanks Kaitlin. Hope you come back next week to read some more.

    • Janet said:

      Thanks. I really focused on the moon only, blotting out the other images in the photo (clouds, trees etc.)

  1. neat little allergory – and an unexpected point of view. very nice.

    • Janet said:

      thanks Craig. I was worried about how this one was going to come across. I think this week I could have used some more words. I know I’m referring to the moon landing. I hope that is what you sensed too.

  2. Jeannie said:

    it’s short but says so much about heartache. Nicely done.

    • Janet said:

      yes, my poor protagonist certainly had her heart stommped on.

  3. I got it right away. Nice job. And thanks for the comments on mine and for spelling “favourite” in a way familiar to me. 😉

    • Linda said:

      Favourite is my favourite spelling too 🙂

      • My grandmother, who taught me to read and write, was Irish, so I’ve spelled in British English a long time. 😉

        • Janet said:

          It’s funny, I always use british (canadian) english like colour, metre, theatre, but never noticed that “favourite” was different from the US spelling.

    • Janet said:

      I never thought about the clouds – what a great image!

      • Linda said:

        Aw shucks – thanks 🙂

    • Janet said:

      Thanks Sandra. I had a feeling that might be the case – i think it might have been easier to understand had I used a close up of the moon or more words.

  4. Your third line is really strong! I took the meaning too literally until I read the moon landing connection. Now I like it even better!

  5. Michael Fishman said:

    Very mucho powerful! I know this is personal so I don’t expect you to answer, but I wondered what about the picture brought you to this piece.

    • Janet said:

      To be honest, I’m not really sure how my mind works sometimes. I just couldn’t get the image of the moon out of my head, and thought that it’s lonely isolation could be a good metaphor for some sort of relationship, and then I remembered the lunar landing and how I heard that the footsteps will never disappear (not sure if it’s true or not I didn’t google it or anything) and thought how that could transfer into an image of a relationship gone bad.

  6. Evelyn said:

    reminds me of the forever footprints on the moon…

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