Weekly Writing Challenge : Sculpted

This week’s DP Writing Challenge, Easy as Pie, challenges the writer to use metaphors and similes.  For those of you who have read my blog before, you probably know, I am a sucker for a good metaphor.  Today’s post is longer than my usual 50 words, but I was having such a good time with this one, I just couldn’t stop. Enjoy.


Baring myself to him, I let his smooth hands shape me like clay. Gentle but firm, he created contours where there were none. Until this moment I had felt shapeless and ill-defined.  In my malleable state, I begged him, Make me yours.  And he did. He worked long and hard, molding me into his dreams and desires. I was pliable and willing under his touch and oh, the heat we generated…

I let it consume me.

But when the fire went out, I was left brittle and damaged.  And he – disappointed by my fragility – moved on to a new project.

  1. Jonesingafter40 said:

    Metaphorically speaking, that was a great piece. 😉 (I’m not sure if my comment was metaphorical or not, but you did a great job on the challenge. Enjoyed the twist!)

    • Janet said:

      Thanks. It was fun to write.

  2. namelessneed said:

    clever & fun/ Thanx friend

    • Janet said:

      Thank you. I hope I didn’t get too carried away.

  3. This is beautiful and sad – regardless of the metaphor challenge – it stands apart

    • Janet said:

      I’m glad you liked it. Your comment made my day.

  4. That’s a very good little story! I like the metaphor a lot.

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